I have revised the draft throughout the day, cutting and adding here and there, simplifying lines. The most significant questions seems to be those of verb tense and the passage of time within the poem. I intended this to be read as an "agenda" of what was to be done during a somewhat fanciful (and dreary) month.
The poem may want to be something else.
I'll have to sleep on the question of how time passes within the poem; of how much "will" happen and how much simply "happens."